Today I created a spaceship out of lego. I then wrote a story about my trip to space. I really liked building my spaceship and using the onomatopoeiawords. I found the coming up with ideas for similes difficult. Here is my story:
Wow, this writing is awesome Kyle! I really felt like I was there in your rocket ship. Great language features and use of onomatopoeia. I noticed that you said similes were difficult. I love the one you have used about the gum tree! Awesome work. Maybe you could challenge your self to try and use at least one simile in each piece of writing that you do to help you get better at using them.
Wow, this writing is awesome Kyle! I really felt like I was there in your rocket ship. Great language features and use of onomatopoeia. I noticed that you said similes were difficult. I love the one you have used about the gum tree! Awesome work. Maybe you could challenge your self to try and use at least one simile in each piece of writing that you do to help you get better at using them.
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