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Thursday, 23 April 2020

Show not tell

Today for writing I did a show not tell story describing one of my favourite places. I tried not to describe anything I could see just what I felt, heard and smelt.
Can you guess where I am?


My mystery place


I go to my favourite place. I think eel’s are splashing,
I sort of hear sparrows squawking like pelicans.
I hear water banging together. It smells fishy.
I feel squishy mud beneath my feet.
It is noisy here like a hippopotamus watering hole. 
I feel sharp things on my feet like glass.
Where could I be?

3 comments:

  1. Hi Kyle,
    I love all of the amazing describing words that you have used. Well done!
    This is a hard one. Is your favourite place down by the creek?
    I have sent you a quick email about your blog.

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  2. You must be eeling somewhere! Maybe near your house. Great work. Kyle. You have used some great language in this piece of writing. I like the way you used descriptive language like 'squishy mud beneath my feet' it sounds very fun where ever you are!

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  3. Hi Kyle
    Well it's definitely somewhere wet, maybe a river or stream where you will find eels. I enjoyed reading your writing as it includes great language about what you can see, hear, smell and feel. I wonder if you can taste anything in the air?

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